The Existence of Power

[B0b]

Post all reviews/comments here. Your feedback is much appreciated, as are any witty insults you feel brewing at the back of your mind.

Story link here (http://otaku-streamers.com/community/showthread.php?7856-The-Existence-of-Power)

[mlcdl]

Well your right that people here do not read a long wall of text(which I am included most of the time).

To the story, somehow it is too short. How about adding 4 more scenes on the next chapter.

[B0b]

Well your right that people here do not read a long wall of text(which I am included most of the time).

To the story, somehow it is too short. How about adding 4 more scenes on the next chapter.

I was trying to shorten it as much as I could, normally that part alone would be around 4000 words so I see what you mean. I was also in a bit of a rush to continue writing my book (which is a wall of text) so I left it a bit undone. Anyway, thanks for the suggestion, and as a heads up I am planning multiple murder scenes in the next part.

[mlcdl]

4000 words in this one sounds long indeed.And wow multiple murders with this intro. Hmm I think that I'm gonna wait with anticipation.

Dude, I just notice, is this a magical story or it is only as I see?Anyway, somehow I think that this story would be either magic or supernatural.

[B0b]

You'll see. I'm writing it in a similar style to Mahou Shoujo Madoka Magica. You could call it supernatural, but I personally like to think of it as a bit of everything.

[mlcdl]

On some point of view, it reminds me of Angel Beats! and Haruhi Suzumiya. And you also said that your going to make it like of Madoka so it become more interesting.

Though I wonder what it means on the story of the NPC's.

Sorry if you notice that I'm not giving reviews just comment. The reason is I dont want to give a review when I'm reading an unfinished story.

[B0b]

On some point of view, it reminds me of Angel Beats! and Haruhi Suzumiya. And you also said that your going to make it like of Madoka so it become more interesting.

Though I wonder what it means on the story of the NPC's.

Sorry if you notice that I'm not giving reviews just comment. The reason is I dont want to give a review when I'm reading an unfinished story.

Don't worry about it I'm pretty happy that anyone is commenting at all lol. Reviews would be pretty unreasonable when there isn't even 5000 words in the story yet.

About the NPCs, I don't really want to say too much about them because 1. They are a core plot device and 2. It would be a REALLY long explanation. I use the same base mechanics for all of my stories though so if you read Eternity Works you will gain a far better understanding of the events (don't force yourself though, it's a giant wall of text). Anyway, all will be revealed eventually; please look forward to it.

[mlcdl]

About 1 - IV, the first word that come into my mind is "WOW" especially when the cat start asking for powers. Before on that part, I was shock with the turn of events on how they start losing and how everything turned into that disaster state.

And I think I got the idea parts where it can be the like of Madoka in that part IV. And basing from the ending of chapter 1, there would be some unexpected events in the later part of the story.

[B0b]

Thanks for the great feedback, really appreciate it. The only reason I got the parts up so fast was because I knew that someone was genuinely interested in it, which kind of drove me into a rage to finish 1-IV on thursday lol. Anyway I need a bit of a break to continue my book, but will definitely get the next part up by the end of the week.

[mlcdl]

don't rush yourself on doing this one. I'll wait with patience on this one since that the story got my interest.

Hmm I see some changes from part 1, that was good for a change of pace. And the ending made me realize that Vincent notice the events on his dream or I could say it on that way as the real things happened before.

Just got finish reading it. I dont know why but I am always hook on this kind of writing, the supernatural based. The story getting better as time passed by. And Sana appearance made another arc in the story. I'll wait for more of this.

[B0b]

Thanks for the generous comments. I hope that you will continue to follow this.
:bow:

[mlcdl]

2-V is really great. Even thought that is only a simulation, the scenes were good enough. Vincent ability become vasts as the story progress. I cant tell yet what kind of power/ability he have but the way he can calculate his ability is freaking great.

[B0b]

I am now officially going to go into the routine of one part per week. For those of you who are following this (only one confirmed person so far -_-), be advised that a new part will be posted every saturday or sunday. Thanks to Mlcdl for his support, I am not exaggerating when I say he's the reason why I haven't dropped this yet XD

[knipyoko]

Nice story. Keep it up.

[mlcdl]

that was a surprising ending for chapter 3. And it seems that there are new questions in the story to be reveal soon.