Review/Comments thread for Summer Romance

[KeiichiMamoru]

Here's a Review/Comments thread for Summer Romance by nakahara24

[Snoozy19]

I'll be using Spoiler tags since there will be some spoilers in them.. So if you (the reader) have not yet read the story then read it first before you read this.. Chao!!

-Chapter 1-

Nice work, I enjoyed the first chapter very much. It felt like reading an actual side story to the series.

The way Kallen and Shirley reacted when hearing that C.C has become Lulu's gf was very funny to say the least.

There's no problem in the grammar or anything, its detailed rather precise.

The story is so far very good but i won't know until I read the next chapter....XD-Chapter 2-I like the 1st chapter better.
In this chapter, C.C. acts way too Bitchy and overreacts over the simplest thing.
I was hoping that there would be more drama or some sort in this chapter but its still a nice follow-up to the first.

I noticed that you had some incomplete words so i guess you should correct it...XD

Try finishing up this story....-Chapter 3 -It looks like things are getting tense. Lelouch is starting to have feelings for C.C.- Chapter 4 - Kinda short but well written.

I'm not sure why it's titled 'Tug of war' but somehow it fits.

I've seen two people falling off a bed and ended up kissing so it was kinda expected when Lelouch and C.C. were on the same bed, but it still is nice touch to the story.

Shirley is I guess that one character in the story that makes things complicated between him and C.C..... If Kallen finds out that Lelouch's true identity then I guess that she'll be acting like Shirley too....lol

~ looking forward the next chapter ~

[nakahara24]

thank you snoozy...^_^

[tuyenbchu]

huh? i didn't see even a single word by nakahara24 :(

[Snoozy19]

I'll be using Spoiler tags since there will be some spoilers in them.. So if you (the reader) have not yet read the story then read it first before you read this.. Chao!!

- Chapter 5 -Not much really happens in this chapter, I like the beginning and ending but the middle parts were not as interesting....

I just don't care much about Rival's and Mily's problems (As far as I'm concerned).

The way this chapter was written gave me a slight feeling that you rushed it... (Take your time)

~ I'm wondering if your gonna kill C.C off in the next chapter, I keep thinking that the last shot killed her (Because Lelouch screamed her name in the end)....P.S. = have you tried posting this story at Fanfiction.net? You might get alot of reviews if you do....XP

[nakahara24]

i havent done that..but maybe ill try to to that some other time^_^...thanks for the that..

[vanrald08]

fan made story of code geass?

[nakahara24]

yes vanrald^_^

[Snoozy19]

I'll be using Spoiler tags since there will be some spoilers in them.. So if you (the reader) have not yet read the story then read it first before you read this.. Chao!!

- Chapter 6 - It was kind of short but at least Lelouch and C.C. were alive... (too bad you let Mao live...lol)

C.C. have finally admitted to herself that she is inlove with him and Lelouch kissing her while she was on the bed proves that he too ihas strong feelings for her (I think)...lol

I can't wait to see what Suzaku does when he finds out that she's alive...
~ This turned out to be another GREAT chapter........ Looking forward to Ch. 7

[nakahara24]

thank you snoozy...

[Snoozy19]

Before I comment.... Am I the only one that likes this fanfic???
I'll be using Spoiler tags since there will be some spoilers in them.. So if you (the reader) have not yet read the story then read it first before you read this.. Chao!!

- Chapter 7 -
Lelouch and C.C. getting stranded was a nice addition to the storyline, its better than all of them just talking on the Yacht arguing and stuff...

I'm pretty sure that they'll be found by the others but I'm curious what you plan on adding while they're still stranded...Maybe something Fluffy..LOL

Oh yeah, it seems that the new chapters are getting shorter and shorter....why is that??

~ Anyways, I'll wait for the update.
And I'll stop with the frequent messages that I send you everytime I finish a chapter, I have a feeling that your getting irritated by them...:-]- Chapter 8 - C.C's becoming suicidal....LOL
"Die. Starving. No pizza?" .... I laughed like crazy at that part....>XD
I bet if she was locked inside Pizza Hut, she'll clean out their entire stock...hahahahahahahahaha

I was so shocked when Lelouch and C.C. talked about their feeling towards one another at the end of the chapter... i was even more shocked when he actually kissed her...SO FLUFFY!!!! "CHAAAAA!!!"

Suzaku must really cherish his friends since he insisted in using his nightmare to search for them... typical Suzaku...lol

~ It maybe a short chapter but it sure was GOOD reading it...
I'll be looking forward for when chapter 9 gets posted.- Chapter 9 -Yet another fine chapter...LOL
C.C. was funny when she implied that Lelouch was a kissing maniac..
When Suzaku came to their rescue i was expecting C.C and Lelouch to be happy but instead they were like not paying any attention to him....There was no "Suzaku, you finally found us!!!!!!!!!!" or something like that....XD

Oh well, at least they were back with the others....- Chapter 10 -Does she really act like that towards her stuffed plushy?...hahahaha
She reacts funny when it comes to the stupidest things, It was even her fault why it went missing..LOL
Also, why'd they all search the entire place for it when they could of just searched their room.. Common sense Lelouch, hehehehehe

I wish you were an artist so in that case I could see how Lelouch and C.C. looked in their yukata..XD
- Chapter 11 - I never really liked Shirley that much so her getting dumped by Lelouch was for the best. She's too much of a girly to be a good match for him anyway. I kinda expected that to happen anyways when she confessed to him, you know all the things that happened to Lelouch and C.C throughout the story, it was bound to lead to love...XD
When he got bullied by those guys I too was wondering why he was such a wimp...- Chapter 12 -When he chased C.C and confessed that he loves her and not that emotional girl (Shirley), it made me all fuzzy inside..hahahaha
I do feel a sense of pity for Shirley but its nothing that a refreshing soda can cure..lol
C.C. was so dense when Lelouch was trying to confess to her, it makes me wanna smack her just for being soo emo.
The next scene got me confused big time. Why would she want to forget what love is?
and why in the world did she go to Shirley for advice?? Her mentality is like Shirley's.. :/
The line Milly stated "Are you really in that relationship with C.C.-san?" got me off my chair and on the ground laughing..XP
>Major awkwardness for Lelouch right there..ahahaha<
Rivals and Kallen were acting weird trying to eavsdrop at the conversation but I guess curiousity never hurted anyone right?
~ This chapter was great Sai.. :3- Chapter 13 -OMG!! The beginning was such a huge surprise.. I never imagined Milly annoucing such an activity..lol
And to make it more interesting, you made the pair of Lelouch and C.C as the main characters...Again, such an awkward moment for the two of them.
I got to say, it was pure comedy.. XDDD
Euphy's script for the play is perfect. It can really relate to what C.C's life has been like (I think...lol)
When they were practicing the scenes, Rivals and Kallen were annoying. Even Shirley became jealous over the kssing scene *typical for her

I'm curious too as how Euphy came upon the story, next chapter I guess.. :3~ Chapter 12 has got to be my favorite....
Really looking forward Ch. 14

[nakahara24]

thank you Snoozy for your commnets..i really appreciate it... i love comments...

[Snoozy19]

I'll be using Spoiler tags since there will be some spoilers in them.. So if you (the reader) have not yet read the story then read it first before you read this.. Chao!!

- Chapter 14 -Their early morning fight gave me the giggles..lol
I thought that it was sweet that they slept together innocently.. It must ave been super cute If I were to see it...hahaha
The tension during breakfast was hilarious due to the fact that it was all pointing to C.C. and Lelouch.
Rivals got my sympathy for getting hit all the time by Kallen and Milly...*poor Rivals...lol

The things that happened next wasn't really interesting since you focused only on Milly and Rivals after that. But it is still cute that she does have some feeling for him instead of just being her slave and punching bag.

Oh well, I'll just wait for the next for the play rehersals to continue.- Chapter 15 -Another love filled morning except this time its Euphy's.. :D

and as always, Lelouch and C.C are still in a difficult and yet cofusing situation. Well, I guess its mostly

because of C.C's mixed feelings for him.

I swear, why not just accept the dude's feelings and live happily ever after??....*sighs

Her talk with Euphy should help her a bit about her true feelings for him but she is soo stuborn. - Chapter 16 -Their rehersals are getting pretty good especially the parts when Lelouch and C.C practiced the kissing scenes.

Although the bet theat Suzaku and lelouch made got me hyped in finding who'll win first but thats still far

into the story. I'm just curious to see how he'll ask C.C since both of them are in a bit of a couples quarrel.

The scene played out by him and C.C in the end was fantastic, its a good glance to how the actual play will

turn out, but the time Lelouch got into the moment was unexpected. He adressed her insted of the

characters name... *Lelouch is such a lover-boy...LOL- Chapter 17 -First off, why would they stay in the rain after having another argument about their feelings???
I mean it must be friggin cold just to stand in the rain like that, also when everyone else was watching them.
C.C. still has her feelings mixed with fear but Lelouch is still desperately trying to love her despite him knowing that she doesn't feel the same.... *A bit touching if you ask me.
She's now feeling extreme doubt about her agreeing to be his pretend girlfriend from the start.

What took me by surprise was the fact that out of everyone, Nina was the one that noticed the problems in Lelouch's and C.C's situation from the start... well, not from the start but she observed that something was wrong when they first announced that they were a couple.- Chapter 18 -Awesome!! The play has started.
The starting point of the chapter really gives one a sense of tension reading the few lines that C.C and Lelouch made. At least they both remained calm even before the play was under way.

Its kinda weird to comment on this chapter since its mostly the acts of the play and its like trying to comment on a new story.
The intro was great and was clearly stated even though I felt that it wasn't original.
Its mostly the opposite when it comes to plays like these, The prince falls in love with a beautiful commoner but then troublesome issues arise preventing their relationship to continue.....etc.
Still, the originality was used in a perfect situation so its not sucky...XD

The name Yuki that Lelouch is using has a sort if boringness to it... But since he was raised as a commoner its not a big surprise.
But Claire's is truly a name for royalty.. :D

The last act in this chapter was still wasn't a surprise to me due to the fact that the plot was already said back in the previous chapters (I think.... kinda forgot *gomen)

~ Rarely no errors in grammer and in words that were mispelled.

[nakahara24]

thank you for writing comments and reviews...i really appreciate all of your comments to me...^_^

[Snoozy19]

Summer Romance CH.19 - The Play 2

To the reader (except for the author), I suggest you read the story from the start to get a better understanding to what is written inside the SPOILER tag below.

- Chapter 19 - This continuos part was better than I expected, it was waaaaay better than the ending chapter that I imagined in my head. Although the twist of Claire ending up being killed in the end was unexpected but I guess that's what makes it a good twist though a tragic one as you said.

Claire's (C.C) acting really made me stick to the story (both the play (at the moment) and the actual story ? either way would do?haha). It's a perfect part to start off after the beginning of this chapter. Even the others gave her and Lelouch credit for the acting they performed (makes me remember the plot of High School Musical and any other boy-girl love affair regarding popularity towards a group? 'Mind me if what I said didn't make any sense').

As for the play, I can see that some parts were left untold or rather just described in a short paragraph? like the part of Claire's mother and sister being killed and her being framed or how she escaped? or How In The HECK did Yuki lost his memories of Claire. It would have been interesting of how that happened but seeing that this is the last part of the story I can relate to you that you wanted to get this story over with?. ;P

In the ending moments where the two of them danced, I felt sad that it was the end and that the series wasn't like this story for which it would make a fantastic (side story if given the chance) of Code Geass? though to be honest, I don't really give a damn about the other characters except for C.C and Lelouch but then love triangles wouldn't appear to complicate things?haha Leave the romance of Rivals and Mily out of it?. After rereading that previous chapter my mood was different from back then to when I first read that chapter ? It made me flinch?LOL

Anyways, this wraps up my review for the last part if Ch.19! I hope you appreciate this review Sai (Yeah, that's right! I remembered your name..hahahaha), It took me a long while to find the time to finish this chapter (part 2) and make a review for it, though I sort of think that it's not long enough? To make you feel better I already tagged this story as one of my fav's. a few months ago.

Thanks for the Awesome Story!

[blackXgurl]

yeah .,., how interesting ,.,.

[rakusa]

it's like the thread of snoozy, lol

thanks for this thread anyway..

:D

[Fubuki]

Wow! Such an amazing story! This should be turned into an OVA!