Perfect Girl Computer Girl reviews and comments

[ZenNaari]

Here you can give your comments/reviews on Perfect Girl Computer Girl

[Snoozy19]

Okay, I accidentally posted my comment on the story thread but it wasn't there anymore. I thought that it would just be redirected on this review thread, so I'll just have to type it here again......what a hassle, so much for the new mods.....:/
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The story was pretty imaginative, so no wonder it was under 'Original Stories'.
Alot of the scenes in the story can be depicted from live people like you and me, I guess thats why I enjoyed reading it. Although I'm not saying that I talk to my computer like its a person, thats just plain (a little) creepy...lol

It's just like talking to a pet but instead its a machine, and that machine happens to be your lover which is also (a little) creepy.

The scenes when you.....I mean Zen tells the PC that he loves it, that was my favorite part....I laughed and awed at the same time. I guess you can say that the thoughts of weird romance was stirring in my mind at the moment.

Lastly, Here's something thats based on my opinion (although everything in this post is my opinion).
If Zen were to browse hentai online, wouldn't PC get angry and dump his ass...lol
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There were a few misspelled words but it was only minor errors.
I'm pretty sure that the readers can still understand it.
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Keep up the good job ZEN NAARI..
PS. Will the next chapter have ecchi in it?........XP (NV, disregard the question)

[Graveflower]

Interesting story though I think the work itself is amateur. You could have spiced it up a little on giving more detail instead of all that dialog. All in all keep trying, you seem to have some good ideas going on, just need to make the work a little more interesting. ^^

[appoloin]

Its very imaginative and could be good if written properly; i like but think that what the characters say is a bit how do i say..... strange.
when u read a book/story it should kinda paint a picture. if u rewrite some of what they say i think it would be great.

[ZenNaari]

Wow... don't blame me... I just typed this down with my E-71... read my other story... "Sparks" has more detail...

[Jarsha]

Over all I think its pretty good, though its not much coming from me I see quite a bit of potential in it =o, however, while I do find it quite interesting; it seems to be lacking. I can't really tell you what I mean by that as I'm not quite sure of it myself, its nothing major, just... I guess it seems like it typed up pretty quickly. I like the idea behind though =o even if I find the thought of a Male x Computer kinda creepy xD. Good job and good luck with the rest of it, I'll keep an eye on your work.

[ZenNaari]

... watch chobits... >.>

[ratratrat098]

I find this one quite interesting. The story reminds me of Chobits and Akikan. Also Zen reminds me of Shinra of DRRR! , being a guy who passionately loves a weird woman and PC reminds me of Celty who returns Zen with favored intimacy. I also wondered why Pixel-sensei did not get surprised that PC exist.

Dude, you should continue writing this story.

[hakitser]

what ! where is the next chapter im so addicted to this storie i wants moar X3 plz its an awesome storie