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AJjudez
06-16-2010, 06:56 AM
(Review Thread)
I wish the world recognize me as responsible person (The Deliquent Student)
http://otaku-streamers.com/community/showthread.php?4722-I-wish-the-world-recognize-me-as-responsible-person-%28The-Deliquent-Student%29&p=87048#post87048

Post your comments here and reactions and suggestion here
i dont mind if you correction it....just feel free to comment..
so that i can make a better one next time....
Thanks for reading....
mind if you guys can suggest some cool names,,,

Snoozy19
06-16-2010, 07:49 AM
Not bad dude, the story really is interesting. It kinda reminds me of Baki the grappler though.

The grammar needs improving but you did a good job of portraying the details.

The name of the moves used by the gangsters was pure original, I liked the Utimate elbow job (it sounds so perverted) thats why it made me laugh.

Oh yeah, *** kinda resembles Ichigo Kurusaki...I still remember the sketch you made of him thats why.

Were you only planning to end it there or are you gonna make a part 2?

Keep up the good work though!!

AJjudez
06-16-2010, 08:31 AM
ohh tnks ill try to make the part 2 maybe i should learn more english.....ohh well thanks for reading

cfffriss
06-16-2010, 10:14 AM
Yes you should improve your grammar but overall its pretty interesting

and ohh good work in drawing

I see that you need some name recommendations in new char .. okay then i strongly suggest this name
"Shinotski Rin"
LOL

B0b
01-15-2011, 06:55 PM
Lol at the pics, but the storyline is a bit cliche. Only the beginning though (I hope), so I can't make any real judgements. Oh yeah, and grammar.

catalyst21
01-15-2011, 07:56 PM
what an awesome name!,...***

tambulance
01-15-2011, 07:56 PM
Just grammar. I like the tension in the class room.