Review Thread for "an abstrusity"

[KeiichiMamoru]

Here's a Review Thread for "an abstrusity"

[ZenNaari]

I think the story was extremely simple... no climax at all... Try imagining an anime is your head and disscuss the characters first... then decide on a genre... then watch your little characters play in your head and just type down whatever they're doing... don't just put whatever is in your head... oh and yeah, Use notepad to type down your stories... if you use word, all those quotation marks will turn into ?'s...

[jeiru01]

I think the story was extremely simple... no climax at all... Try imagining an anime is your head and disscuss the characters first... then decide on a genre... then watch your little characters play in your head and just type down whatever they're doing... don't just put whatever is in your head... oh and yeah, Use notepad to type down your stories... if you use word, all those quotation marks will turn into ?'s...


I see. haha. don't worry, I'll do better next time. and after all, it's just the chapter one. :D thanks for the review.

[ZenNaari]

Chapter two made me realize, this is some kind of European novel. Somewhat realted to, "The Bread And Butter Journey."

I haven't seen any punchline yet, so I encourage you to do so... unless the climax was that part where the kiss scene guy appears...

Anyway, this was better than the first, better fix up those "..." though...

good luck on the next one...

[Jarsha]

While I find the idea of your story to be nice... I don't wish to be mean but your writing style is just... well simple. What age group is this geared towards?
Chapter two did noticeably better then chapter one.
Good luck and I am waiting for chapter three =3