jeiru01
03-07-2010, 06:21 PM
Review Thread : http://otaku-streamers.com/community/showthread.php?p=56566#post56566
CHAPTER 1: “SUNRISE”
The Ascent of the Sun clears the darkness, surrounding the land. It brings a light that moves everywhere within it’s reach. Another day, another start. Some of the light went inside a hut and waking a Blonde girl from her slumber. She lifts herself from bed and readies herself. She walks with a pair of cold green eyes. She hears the smooth flow of water, in the river nearby together with the chirp of the birds, a sound describable as peaceful. She walks outside and watches the river. She knew that it was truly a peaceful view, and then the door of the hut made a sound, like someone pushed it suddenly.
“NIKOLA!” a voice from the hut interrupted Nikola’s concentration.
The Blond lady looks back with a cold gaze. She sees a man around his 20’s scratching his head. Annoyed, Nikola looks back and walks nearer to the river. The man walks out of the hut with his heavy feet.
“Nikola! I can’t believe it! I have lost again! This is unacceptable!”
“The sun has just risen and you’re already trying to annoy me, Arthur.” Nikola said while looking at the direction of the river.
“I just can’t believe it! I mean, I’m always losing to a girl!” “Oh this is such a disgrace!” Arthur says.
“I’m not trying to win over you, you’re just thinking that. And if you’re talking about me, waking earlier than you, Then It’s you’re fault for always sleeping late. And besides, I’m not joining you’re lame childish games.” Nikola walked nearer to the river.
“Childish games? I’m not a kid anymore! Keep in mind that I’m older than you, so you should be respecting me more often.” Arthur said.
“True, you’re older than me in body and age, but in mind… Heh.” Nikola smiled.
“So now you’re saying that you’re mind is more matured than mine?” Arthur said.
“Good you got it.” Nikola says while looking at Arthur.
“You’re rude Nikola!” Arthur answered.
“Go away from me” Nikola answered while turning around to look at the river again.
“Excuse me for interrupting this little conversation. What are you guys arguing about anyway?” A guy from the hut came out.
“Ask the monkey.” Nikola answered
“So now you’re saying that I’m a monkey?” Arthur replied
“I didn’t know that you’ll get that easily. So you’re not brainless at all, But still a monkey.” Nikola said
“So now you’re saying that I’m brainless?” Arthur says and Nikola Nods.
“You’re Evil Nikola!” Nikola answers with an evil smile.
“Excuse me for interrupting again, ah, hey Arthur will you come with me to the marketplace?” The Brown haired man interrupted the two.
“Me? Marketplace? What’re we going to do in there?” Arthur says while scratching his head.
“What do you think?” Nikola said.
“I don’t know?” Arthur looked to his left and held his chin down.
“You truly are brainless, Brainless monkey” Nikola’s words were calm.
“Hey! I’m not brainless!” Arthur replied with one of his arms behind his head.Nikola looked at Tristan who was smiling.
“Hey Tristan-” Nikola’s words were interrupted by Tristan.
“Nikola, Call me Big Brother” Tristan replied with his point finger pointing to himself.
“Nikola stopped for a moment and continued.
“Buy some bread”
“Okay” Tristan counts the coins from his pocket and looks at Nikola.
“Well, we better be going now” Tristan pulls Arthur’s Left arm, when…
“Ah Tris-” Nikola’s word’s where interrupted again.
“It’s Big brother, Nikola” Tristan words were immediately followed by Nikola’s words.
“Keep a good eye to that monkey beside you”
“Don’t call me that!” Arthur joined in
“Sure I will” Tristan replied.
Arthur Looked at Tristan at an annoyed face.
“I doubt that he will be a good monk- Brainless monkey,
in the marketplace, He might start a ruckus or something” Nikola Added.
“Why you!” Arthur replied.
“Someone pushed the door of the hut. Interrupting the three outside.
“What a lovely day! Good morning everyone! A man with a shirt beard spoke. Hubert is his name.
“Morning father,” the three replied.
“Now now, you shouldn’t fight with each other, you might hurt yourselves and that’s not good” Hube replied.
“Oh, Father” Hube looked at Tristan. “I and Bra-“Arthur looked at Tristan in a mad way.
“I mean Arthur will be going to the market place now. Bye!” Tristan pulled Arthur’s Left ear.
“Have a safe journey!” Hube replied.
As Arthur and Tristan walked away, Nikola walked to get a big basket, and walked to the woods.
“I’ll be collecting some firewoods” Nikola said.
“Okay be careful” He replied.
“What’s dangerous about collecting some firewoods? Words that Nikola muttered as she goes to the Woods.
Hube waved his hand to bid goodbye, and as soon as he saw Nikola going farther, he lowers his hand and slowly closes his smile. He Lifts the axe from being stacked at the tree trunk remains and starts to slice the remaining firewoods near him.
~
Nikola doesn’t give even a small glance to the smiling Hube; she looks straight to the direction that she is heading, Together with the basket on her back. She walks to a place where she knows there will be some firewood. She eventually fins some and looks at it. She lowers her body and examines the woods if it is best to use as firewood. She puts them in the basket and stands up to look for some more. Immediately after looking around, She spots more under a big tree. Seeing that they weren’t wet, She reaches for it and gets a hold of it. Then she feels something piercing her hand. As an impulse, she let’s go of the wood and looks at her aching hand. She stares at it, as a small amount of blood rushes out. She was thinking on what she will do to stop it when:
“Nikola! Where are you?” Arthur’s voice echoed.
Nikola pulled a handkerchief from her pocket and tied it to her bleeding hand. Arthur then spots Nikola’s basket and goes near it. He then sees Nikola kneeling In front of the Big tree.
“So you’re here too” Nikola Muttered
“Nikola, so there you are, Tristan told me to ask you: How many loafs of bread do you want us to buy? Arthur replied
“Tell him to buy 8 pieces of Round bread” Nikola replied while looking at the firewoods and trying to hide her wound.
“Ah Nikola, Why aren’t you picking those woods, they look like they’re suitable to use as firewoods, Let me help you with that”
Nikola uses, her left arm to pick the woods, avoiding the wood that pierced her hand. Arthur looked at Nikola, puzzled on why Nikola is using her left arm, Instead of his Right arm. As soon as she had put the other firewoods to the basket, She stands up and carries the basket.
“Is something wrong with your right arm” Arthur asked.
“It’s none of your business, Brainless monkey” Nikola replied
“Aha! You must be hiding something from me!” Arthur said with a smile. “Come on, Show it to me”
“Mind your own business” Nikola said
“Come on, show it” Arthur added
Arthur pulls Nikola’s right arm and saw a handkerchief tied to it.
“Are you hurt Nikola? Come let’s go back to our hut and cure that”
“I’m fine. Don’t worry about me” Nikola Replied.
“You know that a single wound can cause you lot’s of problems” Arthur stood up and continued.
“You should be more careful Nikola, Just like me.” Arthur raised his chin up and placed both his hands to his waist.
“I’m a very careful man” “So careful that I don’t get any wounds or catch any illnesses, unlike you”
Arthur pointed his finger to Nikola who was silently listening to Arthur’s words.
“Who wants everything in her own way” Arthur continued
“Doing things that you should be thinking first. Why won’t you listen to your smart, good looking and nice brother! I could be a role model for you Nikola!” “Use your brain; - wait who is the Brainless monkey now? Arthur laughed, then steps back a little. He then steps on a dry twig, it cracked.
“I think I stepped on something. I wonder what it is.” Arthur muttered while looking at his back.”
“Probably, accurately, my patience, cracking” Nikola said with a very calm voice.
Arthur looks back to the direction where Nikola stands. Arthur stayed silent.
“Didn’t I tell you, to mind your own business?” Nikola said while picking a long
wood from the basket and holds it like a sword. Arthur steps back a little.
“N-Nikola, you know that sword fighting is something that should only be used when fighting an enemy.” Arthur said while trying to smile.
“Am I holding a sword Arthur?” Nikola replied while looking at Arthur.
“N-no?” Arthur replied while stepping back.
Something from the woods came closer to them but they didn’t notice.
“Then this is not sword fighting!” Nikola ran towards Arthur and swung the wood to Arthur.
“Nikola stop it” Arthur answered while trying to get away.
Nikola swings the wood once more and hits Arthur. Arthur falls down. Nikola looks at him.
“You were lucky Arthur. This isn’t a sword.” Nikola says while looking at the wood.
Arthur holds her right arm, which Nikola just hit and stands up.
Nikola looks at Arthur with a cold gaze. Arthur looks down to the ground.
“when you nagged to me about this small wound, you annoyed me” Nikola continued .
“If I said that It isn’t one of your businesses you have to go away from my sight already, I can take care of myself, ALL BY MY SELF” Nikola paused, Arthur stayed silent. Someone behind them started to speak.
“Ah, as stubborn as ever, you have really not changed at all” Arthur looked at the man who just spoke.
Nikola was surprised to what she just heard. If anyone knew of her skills to hold the sword, they might force her to enter the army or be killed for having skills that a man should own and is banned from everyone except the guards and royalties. Nikola dropped the wood. The man went down his horse and the wind blew. He removed his hat. Nikola turned around and saw a brown haired man looking at her.Nikola turned around and saw a brown haired man looking at her. Nikola felt something different. She knows that person.
The man smiled and spoke, breaking the silence between them.
“I’ve come back home, Nikola.”
(haven't thought of a better name T-T) bb
CHAPTER 1: “SUNRISE”
The Ascent of the Sun clears the darkness, surrounding the land. It brings a light that moves everywhere within it’s reach. Another day, another start. Some of the light went inside a hut and waking a Blonde girl from her slumber. She lifts herself from bed and readies herself. She walks with a pair of cold green eyes. She hears the smooth flow of water, in the river nearby together with the chirp of the birds, a sound describable as peaceful. She walks outside and watches the river. She knew that it was truly a peaceful view, and then the door of the hut made a sound, like someone pushed it suddenly.
“NIKOLA!” a voice from the hut interrupted Nikola’s concentration.
The Blond lady looks back with a cold gaze. She sees a man around his 20’s scratching his head. Annoyed, Nikola looks back and walks nearer to the river. The man walks out of the hut with his heavy feet.
“Nikola! I can’t believe it! I have lost again! This is unacceptable!”
“The sun has just risen and you’re already trying to annoy me, Arthur.” Nikola said while looking at the direction of the river.
“I just can’t believe it! I mean, I’m always losing to a girl!” “Oh this is such a disgrace!” Arthur says.
“I’m not trying to win over you, you’re just thinking that. And if you’re talking about me, waking earlier than you, Then It’s you’re fault for always sleeping late. And besides, I’m not joining you’re lame childish games.” Nikola walked nearer to the river.
“Childish games? I’m not a kid anymore! Keep in mind that I’m older than you, so you should be respecting me more often.” Arthur said.
“True, you’re older than me in body and age, but in mind… Heh.” Nikola smiled.
“So now you’re saying that you’re mind is more matured than mine?” Arthur said.
“Good you got it.” Nikola says while looking at Arthur.
“You’re rude Nikola!” Arthur answered.
“Go away from me” Nikola answered while turning around to look at the river again.
“Excuse me for interrupting this little conversation. What are you guys arguing about anyway?” A guy from the hut came out.
“Ask the monkey.” Nikola answered
“So now you’re saying that I’m a monkey?” Arthur replied
“I didn’t know that you’ll get that easily. So you’re not brainless at all, But still a monkey.” Nikola said
“So now you’re saying that I’m brainless?” Arthur says and Nikola Nods.
“You’re Evil Nikola!” Nikola answers with an evil smile.
“Excuse me for interrupting again, ah, hey Arthur will you come with me to the marketplace?” The Brown haired man interrupted the two.
“Me? Marketplace? What’re we going to do in there?” Arthur says while scratching his head.
“What do you think?” Nikola said.
“I don’t know?” Arthur looked to his left and held his chin down.
“You truly are brainless, Brainless monkey” Nikola’s words were calm.
“Hey! I’m not brainless!” Arthur replied with one of his arms behind his head.Nikola looked at Tristan who was smiling.
“Hey Tristan-” Nikola’s words were interrupted by Tristan.
“Nikola, Call me Big Brother” Tristan replied with his point finger pointing to himself.
“Nikola stopped for a moment and continued.
“Buy some bread”
“Okay” Tristan counts the coins from his pocket and looks at Nikola.
“Well, we better be going now” Tristan pulls Arthur’s Left arm, when…
“Ah Tris-” Nikola’s word’s where interrupted again.
“It’s Big brother, Nikola” Tristan words were immediately followed by Nikola’s words.
“Keep a good eye to that monkey beside you”
“Don’t call me that!” Arthur joined in
“Sure I will” Tristan replied.
Arthur Looked at Tristan at an annoyed face.
“I doubt that he will be a good monk- Brainless monkey,
in the marketplace, He might start a ruckus or something” Nikola Added.
“Why you!” Arthur replied.
“Someone pushed the door of the hut. Interrupting the three outside.
“What a lovely day! Good morning everyone! A man with a shirt beard spoke. Hubert is his name.
“Morning father,” the three replied.
“Now now, you shouldn’t fight with each other, you might hurt yourselves and that’s not good” Hube replied.
“Oh, Father” Hube looked at Tristan. “I and Bra-“Arthur looked at Tristan in a mad way.
“I mean Arthur will be going to the market place now. Bye!” Tristan pulled Arthur’s Left ear.
“Have a safe journey!” Hube replied.
As Arthur and Tristan walked away, Nikola walked to get a big basket, and walked to the woods.
“I’ll be collecting some firewoods” Nikola said.
“Okay be careful” He replied.
“What’s dangerous about collecting some firewoods? Words that Nikola muttered as she goes to the Woods.
Hube waved his hand to bid goodbye, and as soon as he saw Nikola going farther, he lowers his hand and slowly closes his smile. He Lifts the axe from being stacked at the tree trunk remains and starts to slice the remaining firewoods near him.
~
Nikola doesn’t give even a small glance to the smiling Hube; she looks straight to the direction that she is heading, Together with the basket on her back. She walks to a place where she knows there will be some firewood. She eventually fins some and looks at it. She lowers her body and examines the woods if it is best to use as firewood. She puts them in the basket and stands up to look for some more. Immediately after looking around, She spots more under a big tree. Seeing that they weren’t wet, She reaches for it and gets a hold of it. Then she feels something piercing her hand. As an impulse, she let’s go of the wood and looks at her aching hand. She stares at it, as a small amount of blood rushes out. She was thinking on what she will do to stop it when:
“Nikola! Where are you?” Arthur’s voice echoed.
Nikola pulled a handkerchief from her pocket and tied it to her bleeding hand. Arthur then spots Nikola’s basket and goes near it. He then sees Nikola kneeling In front of the Big tree.
“So you’re here too” Nikola Muttered
“Nikola, so there you are, Tristan told me to ask you: How many loafs of bread do you want us to buy? Arthur replied
“Tell him to buy 8 pieces of Round bread” Nikola replied while looking at the firewoods and trying to hide her wound.
“Ah Nikola, Why aren’t you picking those woods, they look like they’re suitable to use as firewoods, Let me help you with that”
Nikola uses, her left arm to pick the woods, avoiding the wood that pierced her hand. Arthur looked at Nikola, puzzled on why Nikola is using her left arm, Instead of his Right arm. As soon as she had put the other firewoods to the basket, She stands up and carries the basket.
“Is something wrong with your right arm” Arthur asked.
“It’s none of your business, Brainless monkey” Nikola replied
“Aha! You must be hiding something from me!” Arthur said with a smile. “Come on, Show it to me”
“Mind your own business” Nikola said
“Come on, show it” Arthur added
Arthur pulls Nikola’s right arm and saw a handkerchief tied to it.
“Are you hurt Nikola? Come let’s go back to our hut and cure that”
“I’m fine. Don’t worry about me” Nikola Replied.
“You know that a single wound can cause you lot’s of problems” Arthur stood up and continued.
“You should be more careful Nikola, Just like me.” Arthur raised his chin up and placed both his hands to his waist.
“I’m a very careful man” “So careful that I don’t get any wounds or catch any illnesses, unlike you”
Arthur pointed his finger to Nikola who was silently listening to Arthur’s words.
“Who wants everything in her own way” Arthur continued
“Doing things that you should be thinking first. Why won’t you listen to your smart, good looking and nice brother! I could be a role model for you Nikola!” “Use your brain; - wait who is the Brainless monkey now? Arthur laughed, then steps back a little. He then steps on a dry twig, it cracked.
“I think I stepped on something. I wonder what it is.” Arthur muttered while looking at his back.”
“Probably, accurately, my patience, cracking” Nikola said with a very calm voice.
Arthur looks back to the direction where Nikola stands. Arthur stayed silent.
“Didn’t I tell you, to mind your own business?” Nikola said while picking a long
wood from the basket and holds it like a sword. Arthur steps back a little.
“N-Nikola, you know that sword fighting is something that should only be used when fighting an enemy.” Arthur said while trying to smile.
“Am I holding a sword Arthur?” Nikola replied while looking at Arthur.
“N-no?” Arthur replied while stepping back.
Something from the woods came closer to them but they didn’t notice.
“Then this is not sword fighting!” Nikola ran towards Arthur and swung the wood to Arthur.
“Nikola stop it” Arthur answered while trying to get away.
Nikola swings the wood once more and hits Arthur. Arthur falls down. Nikola looks at him.
“You were lucky Arthur. This isn’t a sword.” Nikola says while looking at the wood.
Arthur holds her right arm, which Nikola just hit and stands up.
Nikola looks at Arthur with a cold gaze. Arthur looks down to the ground.
“when you nagged to me about this small wound, you annoyed me” Nikola continued .
“If I said that It isn’t one of your businesses you have to go away from my sight already, I can take care of myself, ALL BY MY SELF” Nikola paused, Arthur stayed silent. Someone behind them started to speak.
“Ah, as stubborn as ever, you have really not changed at all” Arthur looked at the man who just spoke.
Nikola was surprised to what she just heard. If anyone knew of her skills to hold the sword, they might force her to enter the army or be killed for having skills that a man should own and is banned from everyone except the guards and royalties. Nikola dropped the wood. The man went down his horse and the wind blew. He removed his hat. Nikola turned around and saw a brown haired man looking at her.Nikola turned around and saw a brown haired man looking at her. Nikola felt something different. She knows that person.
The man smiled and spoke, breaking the silence between them.
“I’ve come back home, Nikola.”
(haven't thought of a better name T-T) bb